The Main Keys to Writing a Successful Essay Are Organization, Focus, and Revision

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The paper adequately develops what was promised by the thesis. The thesis is “The main keys to writing a successful essay are organization, focus, and revision.” Yes, the body paragraphs support the thesis. They build on what was pledged in the thesis. The body paragraphs explain the main keys, step by step.

The body paragraphs contain sufficient supporting detail because they describe the main points of the thesis, they give the example “The French Revolution and its impact on France’s politics, economy and society”, as a proper thesis. The supporting detail does contain some information that is unnecessary or irrelevant. The following two sentences are unnecessary. “Such distractions would include the sound of the television blaring in the next room, or your younger sister practicing her violin up the hall. Shut the door on such annoyances and make sure you leave a clear Do Not Disturb sign on the door.” These two sentences are redundant, and the prior sentences before the example suffice in getting the point across. There is a logical development of the points made in the essay. The topics addressed in the thesis are discussed in a proper order and is effective.

The first revision that I would make to the essay would be to add a conclusion paragraph. The last paragraph of the essay currently does not sum up the topic of the essay at all. I would add a concluding paragraph